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« on: October 08, 2008, 05:42:48 PM »

Chapter 6:  Set Sail in the Seas of Scutum!

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And so, the lady comes out from the shadows, holding a compass.  Her top half being covered, she fixes her bra and reveals herself.  She has sandy hair with shades of blue at the ends.  She wears a transparent bandanna with the star map knitted atop.  She has spring green eyes and a tight turtle-neck bra.  Her sleeves are long and striped, each having its own distinctive pattern of waves.  She also wears a small vest covering the other side of her rather big bust.  She also wears tight navy pants with large boots.  In her bottom half, she has a pattern of blue boomerangs on the back-side of her pants taking on the hues of the ocean.

She is a very beautiful woman, but also deadly.  She pulls out what seems to be a knight's sword.  The handle is golden but the blade is made of a translucent diamond-like surface, allowing for light to travel through, yet appears metal like a typical sword.


Woman:  My name is Cecilia De Luca, and that man in those paintings is my brother, Romano De Luca.  What's worse than stealing is destroying personal property, and I would prefer the theft of my dearest artifacts.  I will not let you leave out home to ruins and let you get away with it!

* Cecilia De Luca  raises her leg up and swings the boomerangs off loose at Giino

Cecilia:  Tell me if it hurts, scoundrel!

Giino stares at Cecilia, drooling at the sight.  Memorized, Giino stands still mumbling the words "vs. Cecilia, vs. Cecilia..."

Giino gets hit by the flurry of boomerangs and flies to the wall, but he feels no pain.  Caught nailed by the boomerangs, Cecilia prepares to stop him at his tracks at the center of his body (shoulders, hips, neck).

Cecilia is not that old of a woman.  She is only 17 despite her "womanly features."  Giino is love-struck and cannot break free from his hypnotic state.


Giino (mumbling):  Blondies are fun...

Cecilia:  Mock me?  How about seconds?!

* Cecilia  releases another wave of boomerangs at Giino

Giino is trapped under the second wave, unable to move.  Still unbroken, Giino stares at Cecilia, leaving her in disgust.

Giino:  Do you have a boyfriend?  Girlfriend?

Cecilia:  Your lack of faith disturbs me so.  Why are you not begging for mercy.

Giino:  If this ship really does sink, I'd drown with you any day.

Cecilia:  UGH!

* Cecilia  slaps Giino across the face

Giino grins blissfully and giggles a little.

Cecilia blushes, but hides it, looking away.


Cecilia:  So, why are you truly here?  Am I some Mermaid to you as well?  Pfft!  You're just like the rest of the men!  All with the routines and senseless swaying with catchy sonnets that only make me sea-sick, or at least sick of seeing them.

Hearing loud bangs on the roof and wood shattering into bits of saw dust:

Cecilia:  AND WHAT IS THAT NOISE?!

Loud bangs and sharp noises can be heard in the ceiling over their heads.  Screaming and running in every step.

Giino pulls out a flat and weightless pen with his mouth from the back of one of his hat's small cloths.  He begins writing in the back of the cloth, written in sloppy script and words that appear written in scribbles and black marks.


Giino:  Pull my tag, please.

Cecilia:  I know your kind, you filthy ninja-samurai, or whatever you are!  Expecting me to pull a paper bomb, huh?  NOT GONNA WORK PAL!

Giino:  You know, for a pirate girl, you don't speak like one.

Cecilia pulls it anyway and flips the cloth to the other side.

Cecilia begins to read it, but then gets cut off by Giino.


Giino (generically memorized):  Roses are red, violets are blue.  That vs. more, and glove vs. shoe!  Oh I wish, you flutter with me as each other...

Cecilia turns red and angry.

Giino (continuing):  You make me complete, once I, obsolete.  With that and on-forth, vs. this and off-back.  Will you, dear Cecilia, carry my sack?

Cecilia turns red all over her body and gets ready to punch Giino, but her feelings prevent her so.

Before she makes a complete decision, a large plank of wood falls on Giino's head with great speed, however caused, and knocks Giino out-cold for a few minutes.


Giino (drooling):  ......

Cecilia (hopping around like a school girl):  YES!  YES!  YES!  FINALLY, he shuts up!  Oh well, it was rather romantic.  UGH!  What am I saying?!

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Meanwhile, at the main deck...

Senichi (tired): *Pant, pant, pant*

Romano (exhausted):  *Pant, pant, pant*

* Senichi  springs high to the sail at the very top of the ship

Senichi:  Now you're in for a real treat!

* Senichi  plays a loud but melodious tune under the sail of the ship

Picking up wind, the sounds of the chimes come out louder and clearer.  The high-pitch frequency ripples the ship's surface enterily apart, slowly.  Romano stands still waves his hands as if holding a baton.  He clearly enjoys the musical mayhem.

Romano (humming):  Hmmhmm hmmhmm hmm-hmm hmmmmmm...

Still aware of the true kinks to this trick, Senichi inhales the saw-dust into his sword, stiffing the tunnels, now making it harder and stronger than ever.

Senichi (standing tall in the sun):  Now you'll see what power is like!  Forgive me...

* Senichi  lunges to the ground to stab Romano in the forehead

Romano, lately noticing Senichi after his moment breaks apart, barely dodges the attack, landing at the mast of the ship.

Romano (looking at the stars):  Woah, why so-

Senichi:  PAY CLOSE ATTENTION!

* Senichi  swings his sword horizontally against the floor

This injures Romano greatly, but Romano stands up and stands strong.

Romano (covering his wounds with his own gloves):  You sure seem determined.  Very well, let me counter your definition of power...

Romano clenches his fists together and pulls out his rapier again.  Leaning his hook over the blade, he makes shrieking noises and creates sparks from the blade.

Taking no time to sit around, Senichi does not hesitate to attack and unleashes a wave of slashes from his sword.


* Romano  blocks the wave

Romano:  So troubled to see a man like me attack his own kind like that...

Senichi continues to cut forth through the barrage of guard/defense.

Senichi (growling with each hit):  Grr-rr-rr-rr-rr-rr-rrrah!

* Senichi & Romano  perfectly knock each other back with the force of their blades

Senichi stops for a moment, remembering what Romano had said.  Aware of the fact he was trying to kill one of the Chapters, Senichi drops his guard in hopes to hear more.

Romano (taking his chance):  Why, yes, we are all in this together, right?  Of course, if you kill me, then the rest of this blue marble should go as well.  I count just as much as you do, dear "brother."  Why not settle for wine in this?  If you call out the white-flag, we can have some whiskey and rum as well!  I'll even take you to where you're headed off to!  Ahoy!  What do ya say, lad?

Senichi thinks about it for a bit, and finally puts his sword away.  Suspicious of Romano, he remains in his place.

Romano also puts his sword away and goes into his office.


Romano (yelling from his office):  WHAT KIND OF BRAND DO YOU TREASURE THE MOST?  I HAVE PLENTY!  EVEN THE ONES THAT HAVEN'T COME OUT!

Senichi (puzzled and confused):  But, I can't drink (whispering)... I'M NOT EVEN OLD ENOUGH TO DRINK!

Romano (making noise with a mess of bottles):  DON'T WORRY LAD!  I'M SURE I HAVE A VIRGIN'S STASH IN HERE SOMEWHERE!

Romano walks out with clinking bottles, and opens the door slowly with his back, as if his hands are full.

Senichi expects a cannon to open fire, but when he looks closely, it is clearly Romano holding bottles of stolen rum.


Romano (throwing a non-alcholic wine bottle at Senichi):  Bottom's up!

Romano drinks his favorite whiskey and wipes his mouth clean.

Everything else seems quite as of far.  The seas splash calmer than before, and the omens die out.  Senichi drops his guard for sure this time.

Senichi, looking at his bottle, saves it and puts it away in his pocket.


Romano:  Hmm?

Senichi:  I-I'll drink some later...

Romano (rubbing his beard):  Ahh!  Yes!  Save the best for last!  Cheers for Captain Romano De Luca and his acts of kindness!  Hehe!

Senichi, noticing Romano's short laugh, begins to suspect something else.

Senichi (getting grim):  (You asshole...)

* Senichi  exerts pressure and shakes the ship under him

* Senichi  leaps at Romano, punching him across the face

Senichi:  I'M NOT DONE YET!

* Senichi  finishes it with a flurry of slashes from his claws

Senichi:  Time to walk the plank, matey.

Romano (exhausted and hurt bad):  Enjoying this eh?  You shouldn't be, but I can't blame you either.  I was like that once, before I became a pirate...

Senichi pokes Romano towards the plank, hesitating in the moments to finally plunge him into the unforgiving seas.

Romano smiles with his hands up.


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Meanwhile again, Giino is drooling so hard, it seems he could sink the ship without trying to "mop the floor" like he had planned.

The floor starts sizzling from Giino's saliva, a powerful and acidic venom from Hydri himself, and begins corroding the rest of the room.  Knowing this, Cecelia tries to wake him up.


Cecilia (shaking Giino's shoulders):  WAKE UP YOU HALF-WITTED DROOL-MONKEY!

* Cecilia  grabs him by the balls

Cecilia (rather embarrassed and annoyed):  -Sigh-, if I can't wake him up, then the ship will sink for sure...

A scroll falls from Giino's hat, and Cecilia picks it and begins to read.  It appears to be Giino's vs. matches.

Cecilia (reading with a monocle):  Let's see here.  Wow, he writes awfully small.  Hmmm, it appears to say:

"VS. MATCHES!!!!

- A country vs. a cunt tree
- Rey Mysterio giving someone a 619 vs. him giving someone a 69
- Jack Sparrow vs. cancer
- Cailloh vs. cancer !!!
- Beowulf vs. Dockafox!
- A Blow-job vs. an Inhale-carrier ROFL!!!!
- Oh, you drumming like that vs. you being the world's greatest singer vs. it being ironic because you have no limbs vs. that being ironic because you're deaf vs. that also being ironic because you AREN'T death, but you're George LMAO !!!
- A paradox vs. a pair of ducks... =] < signature by yours truly...

HAHAHAHA!!!!

Cecilia pauses for a moment and rolls the scroll again.  To her, Giino is obviously a clown, but that's what makes Giino, Giino.

Cecilia (puffed and mad):  I can't believe I was falling for an idiot.  But he's my idiot, I guess.

But little does Cecilia know (or forgot), the powerful venom Giino secretes slowly melts the boomerangs, setting him free.  With this, Giino falls to the floor, and as soon as Cecilia notices, she backs away to avoid any contact with the venom and allows for Giino to hit himself flat in the face.

Yes, he gets hits flat in the face.... hard....


Giino (waking with a goofy grin and falling teeth):  Owie....  WHERE AM I?  AM I IN GEORGE LAND?!  OMG!  OMG!  FREE CANDEH!

Giino, looking around, smells the room and finds a foul odor.

Giino (stiffing his chin):  Smells like mold... !

Finally, after Giino realizes he's free from the boomerangs, he looks back at Cecilia to ensure it doesn't happen again.  However, his heart does not let him choose, so he's force to take in whatever Cecilia has to toss.

Giino:  You're hotter than Samantha.  Blondies are cute...

* Giino  gives Cecilia a note

Giino (prancing around like a fairy):  If you were a vs. match, you'd win any day, even against Chuck Norris.  Weeeeee!

The situation is getting out of hand, and as Giino eats his conscience alive with false perception of the girl, he forgets the eroding floors, and slowly sinks down.

Cecilia:  Okay, enough is enough!

Giino (trapped in his never-ending trance):  Cecilia, madam, you're better than weed.  Please oh please Cecilia, CARRY MY SEED!

Once the acid finished eating at the material, Giino falls into the water right beneath the ship.

Cecilia sees this and tries to save him, but fails...


Giino:  GAAAA- *bubbling*

Cecilia:  YOU IDIOT!  LOOK WHAT YOU'VE DONE!

* Cecilia  covers the hole in the ship with her melted boomerangs

Giino sinks down deep into the ocean, vast in fish and possibly dangerous sea monsters.  Clear like a blue desert, only wet, and lush in bits of coral and krill nearby.  The emptiness is enormous from around, yet diverse from afar and visible.  Cold and clammy the water is, however, Giino begins to suffer from a sudden fever.

Giino (feeling nausea):  (Damn, it's so cold... s-s-so c c-c c-cold...)

* Giino  begins to close his eyes and begins to fall into a deep sleep

Back at the inside of the ship, Cecilia feels great regret and mournfulness.  Driven by her pirate instinct, she refuses to dive for Giino at any cost.

Giino, with a heart of gold, also brittle and fragile, lets his destiny fall into the hands of the sea and a woman he cannot trust by any means necessary.

Until.....


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Romano drops his bottle as he walks the plank, bouncing off the side of the ship and shattering i the process.  Down it goes, sinking into the water as it poisons the sea with its alcohol.  Nearby, Giino sleeps with no breath of air.  Instead, however, he sleeps with a short dream:  papers written everywhere, dancing with monkeys and married to Cecilia.  Black bubbles and an inch-deep bath of blood, with each pop making annoying screams and yelps.  The dream turns in to a nightmare, as the puddle of blood begins to make blood-curdling screams.  Cecilia melts into wax and is re-carved into the form of Kitoku.

He comes to give word to Giino, but as usual it isn't a friendly greeting.

But before Giino could fall into anything worse, he already falls into the effect of the alcohol...


Giino (waking up in a drunken fashion):  Ehhh?  Ooooo (looking around), everything looks.... PINK!  I SHOULD MAKE A MATCH ABOUT THAT!

Giino grabs a random flounder and writes on it with a piece of coral.  Not realizing he cannot breathe, he starts to drown again.  However, something different happens.  Despite the effects of the alcohol, Giino reawakens from an even deeper sleep.....

Giino (opens eyes, glowing green):  .....

* Giino  curls in the water with pain, and slithers back into the ship

Giino (with killing intent):  (Here comes..... GIINO!)

* Giino  breaks into the hole of the ship with his sword in his hand

Cecilia, dusting away and trying to put the glass back into the pictures, looks back in surprise.

Cecilia (almost scared):  H-h-how?

* Cecilia  gets up and lifts her right leg up for a third-wave of boomerangs

But before she succeeds...

* Giino  swings his sword at Cecilia, tripping and slitting her leg

Cecilia (tossed back against the wall):  AHHH!!!

Things are starting to get ugly, and not at a moment's notice does Cecilia go for another strike.  This time, she's holding back.

Giino:  Your blood is very appetizing judging from how you shiver.  Continue, and this gauntlet will become ravenous...

Cecilia (reaching the nearest boomerang):  (Yeah right...)

* Giino  goes for the strike, and pelts her to the wall

As he comes spinning like a missile, it only comes to a pause and a moment of silence.....

..... Meanwhile, the seagulls flock by, one dropping atop Romano's hat.


Romano (disgusted):  Awww, that was my favorite hat!

Romano tosses out his captain's hat and looks back at Senichi (now angry), only to hold his hands up in the air again.

Senichi (getting impatient):  You'll abandon ship, or else you'll suffer the judgment of the sword of life.  What will it be?

* Romano  shakes around and drops his bottle

Romano (looking down):  Awww.... AND THAT WAS MY FAVORITE DRINK!

Senichi (sweat dropping):  -SIGH- Very well, it seems you're not hesitant to die yet.

Romano (responding with a smile):  Death before dishonor, lad!

* Romano  jumps 180 degrees in the air and proceeds to slice Senichi

Romano (leaving a cut on Senichi's forehead):  Death before dishonor!

Senichi (falling back):  GAH!!!  BITCH!!!

Romano lands on his feet in a rather cool stance, grinning optimistically.

Romano:  Hee hee...

Senichi:  YOU'RE ANNOYING!

* Senichi  appears on front of Romano as if to trip aside

* Senichi  grabs Romano by the neck, holding him so he does not let go

Senichi (with eyes glowing red):  Stab!  Disperse!

* Senichi  stabs Romano in the stomach and drills him rather gory

Romano (spinning in agony):  AHHHHHHH!!!!!!

Romano is tossed out of his ship to where the plank is.  Landing in the ocean lies his body, bleeding profusely from the brutal attack Senichi unleashed.

Romano (hurt badly):  Oomph.....

Senichi:  Hmph!

Senichi walks to the door leading down stairs to where Giino is.  He puts his hand on the door knob and begins to turn it.

However...


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The knob begins to turn itself.  In fact, the ship seems to slightly tilt here and there.  The sea rises closer and closer, higher and higher.  Senichi pauses and checks outside the main-deck.  The ship is sinking, fast, and it is miles from shore.  If Senichi and Giino ever got a chance to swim, they're in luck.  Just a few more kilometers and they'll be swimming outside the border of Japan.

Of course, it doesn't seem so hard, swimming back, does it?  It ruins their chance to traversing around the world, but if one thing strikes Senichi's mind is that if Romano dies, their global plan for freedom dies.  The question is, what will he do?

Back to where the blushing-boy ran amok with the slithering spirit in his veins, Giino bites Cecilia in her skull and sinks deep for the eye sockets.  At a few seconds notice, Giino stops and lets go.  He managed to pierce through a location in her brain that prevented her thinking of negative thoughts.


Giino (reverting back to normal):  (I can't do it.... No matter how upset I am, I can't...)

Cecilia (putting her hands over her head):  Ehhhehhheehhhh  *grunting*

Giino's heart and feelings for her pulled him out of his void-of-anger.  He cannot help to a-tone to his sins, and after seeing this, something behind her opens.  Cecilia falls backwards hitting the floor.  This is her room...

Giino (carrying Cecilia and walking in):  Wow....  It's awfully small.  Ooooo, a bunk bed!  And wow, they have a great view of the ocean here..... wait....

Giino soon realizes this window is at sea level.  In fact, he feels water underneath his feet.  Something is wrong...

Giino:  Shit!  I gotta get out here!  Come on beautiful, we don't have time to die.

Giino carries Cecilia up to the main deck, where Romano is supposed to be and Senichi is at a state of regret and depression.

Giino:  Hey Senichi, whats up?  What happened to Captain Rum-Mano?

Senichi (craddling his body back and forth):  It's Romano, and I think I killed him.  He's out at-

Hearing this, Cecilia snaps out of her pain (well, some of it at least), and jumps back near the mast.

Cecilia (angered and terrified):  YOU FILTHY LAND CREATURES!  How could you kill my only sibling?  WHY WOULD YOU EVEN TAKE OUR ONLY POSSESSION AWAY?  We don't even have a crew.  You dirty ronin/samurai or whatever you people are disgrace the name of Pirates, even more than our mortal enemies. Have you a soul, and save this ship's life, or it will take us all.  I'm going out there to get my brother back.

Giino:  We're not losing you as well.  There's something out there as well.  If he can't traverse the ocean properly, then what makes you so valiant?  DON'T GO KILLING YOURSELF DAMN IT!

Giino stops Cecilia and attempts to pin her down the ground.

* Cecilia  kick-flips Giino over and dives into the ocean

Giino (grabbing for her but missing):  NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!

Senichi (stopping Giino):  Let her.  She's the only one that can bring him back alive, if any part remains that is...

Giino wipes a tear from his face.  He takes out one of his Vs. Match scrolls and reads out of mourn and cheer.

Giino:  Remember that time, when Karoku was a douche?  And remember that other time, when he was a douche?  *Sniff* and he still is.  Surpassed and overwhelmed by his sheer power and attitude.  He thinks he's better than us.  Hahahahaha *sniff.*

Senichi:  Oh wow Giino, he's not THAT arrogant.  But that is a little funny.  Hey, I feel a lot better!  Sucks for him though.

Giino grabs Senichi's hand and takes him down stairs,  half the basement is already full.

Giino:  Remember what Cecilia said right?  Come on, we have to keep this ship stable and steady.

Senichi (nodding):  Hmph.

Giino and Senichi begin setting the barrels over the hole Giino came through before.  The problem of it all is the the wall of the ship that sinks, and neither items can hang there to cover it up.

In the mean time, Cecilia swims against time, hoping to bring her brother back.  She feels the essence of blood in her skin, and feeling it, recognizes it instantly.  Romano is not too far.   However, so are the sea monsters.....

Sharks come from all over, seeking for her flesh and the trail of blood.  Cecilia swims at top speed like a missile and finally reaches Romano's body.  The sharks close in for brunch.


Cecilia (relieved):  (His heart beats still.  Thank you Lord Christ...)

All of these sharp-toothed water demons surround the siblings.  Cecilia picks for her boomerangs to throw, but stops at the sight of something much larger.....

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From the deep comes the shadow of a creature with a mass so great, its distance only speaks for its true form.

Although, Cecilia does not hesitate to swim back to deck.


Cecilia:  (It can't be.  Not now...)

* Cecilia  ties a rope to one of her boomerangs and hooks it far at the ship

Cecilia pulls against time, racing to make it safe home away from the thing that lurks in the deep.

Back in the ship, only one last hope remains.....


Senichi:  GIINO, QUICK!  WE CAN COVER THIS HOLE WITH YOUR-

Giino:  UGH, NO WAY!  OH GOD!  HOW COULD YOU, UGH, GOD!

Senichi:  .........

* Senichi  slaps Giino across the head

Senichi:  WTF, no.  I meant your vs. matches.  Aren't those papers made of thick cane or something?

Giino (holding his hat to his chest):  ARE YOU MAD?  I CAN'T DO THAT!  *Sniff*  These are my children.....

Senichi (tugging against Giino for this hat):  GIVE ME THAT HAT!

Giino (struggling):  NOOOO!

* Senichi  kicks Giino in the knee and takes his hat, unraveling all the vs. matches

* Senichi  stuffs all the rough material into the hole

........ (5 minutes later) ........

The flow of the ocean water stops.


Giino (crying):  THE HORROR!  MY EXTRA CREDIT!  RUINED!

Senichi:  Oh shutup.  At least we're safe.  Wait, where's the girl?

Giino:  Oh, Cecilia!  Right, let's go back and see if she's alright.

Senichi (running ahead of Giino):  Right ahead of ya.

Giino:  HEY!  HOLD UP!

Giino and Senichi run upwards, but before they open the door to the main deck, they see Cecilia all wet with her brother under her arms.

Giino (relieved):  *Chuckle* (Hehehe, good thing I have my vs. matches in my underwear, and my girl (childish smile))

Senichi:  Thank goodness...  What happened to you?  You're all torn up.

Cecilia stands still without moving an inch.

Cecilia:  It's....

Something large and scaly crawls onto the ship.  It creeps into the center, tearing a hole and causing yet another casualty.  It slowly sinks deeper and deeper and deeper....

(Pause)

Creaking noises upon imbalance of the main deck and the broken silence of the wind.  Seagulls migrate around the ship, and the water appears a thick tortoise.  An bad omen is coming....


Giino (standing still, whispering):  What the heck is going on?

Cecilia hears what appears to be foot-steps inside the ship, and quickly warns the others of the impending doom.

Cecilia:  Quickly!  You two have to leave with my brother!  That life boat is the only one we have.  We can escape the creature!

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Senichi:  Wait.... what monster?  What are you talking about-

Something breaks through the door way downstairs.  A large and dark figure steps out with two maces attached to one another in each end.....   It is Kitoku...

Giino/Senichi:  *GASP!*

Kitoku, with his eye of wrath, closed upon the nature of the incredibly bright day, raises his head to cast a reflection of his glowing eyelid upon  the center of the ship.  He opens his eye slowly, and begins to burn the ship by magnifying the entire vessel from the center.

For whatever grudge he has upon Karoku and his friends, is a story for another time.  Now is the moment that both Pirate and Samurai work together, with one out of conscience.


Kitoku (his eye wide-open):  Hmmmm, I spy with my little eye, a group of misbehaving children.  Thieves of the sea with nothing more than a reputation to scurry and smuggle away, tossing their own ship mates aside; feudal warriors, young and bold, yet lack chivalry and righteousness, are crimes upon my taste in dragging rather delicate graves.  You are all at this moment, my clients, and as my clients, I shall promote your murder by the MIGHT OF MY MACE:  MOURN AND MERCY!  I CALL UPON THE CREATURE:  CHIMERA OF THE SALTED TRENCH!

Kitoku's business is uncanny and mysterious.  This death god tried to kill them before, and tried to kill Karoku then.  However, Kitoku resurrects the two monsters fought by Giino and Senichi in the form of a fusion.

The creature comes out of the center of the ship, where the eye had burned the ship down a great opening.  This behemoth is truly a shocker.  Large and grotesque, it harnesses a long and scaly body.  The skin is slimy and venomous, and the the head resembles an extra-terrestrial shark.  The details are too astonishing for words, but the worst of it all is the result of this being.  It screeches into the air with its bone-shattering cry.....  The Vermilion Carcass has returned in the form of a-new.


Senichi (in awe):  (Shit, so that's where it came from, huh?  Oh well, I guess this isn't about claiming the mast anymore... (looks at Giino))

Giino (so scared, that...):  I CAN'T TAKE IT!

* Giino  takes Coma-Coil out and jumps high in the air; he strikes at the beast with a wave of what he calls...

Giino:  PYTHON JOUST!!!!

Kitoku (non too surprised):  (Hahahahaha, excellent...)

The creature, unflinching, looks up at Giino.  He, on the other hand, continuously attacks onward, hoping to protect his new love-interest from a fate yet foreseen.  If this divine beast is Kitoku's creation, surely it must hold some surprises they were easily sought before, perhaps?

* Vermillion Carcass  lifts it's tail and slams Giino onto the ground

Giino:  NO FUCKING WAY!

Kitoku:  Hahm, Hmhmhmhmhmhm- hahaha...

* Giino  uses his strength to hold the creature back with his own blade, slowly bending as the monster closes in to crush him

Senichi (taking his sword out):  GIINO, NOOOO!!!!!  ((UGH!  I can't move!!!))

* Vermillion Carcass  exerts droplets of what appears to be parasites

Giino:  AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!

Giino falls under the mass of the beast, and lies infected by these parasites.... The creature cries into the air, a rather foul one, and bombards a large wave of water, catapulting the entire ship out several miles more at sea.

Kitoku, all powerful and mighty, walks towards the helpless Senichi and Cecilia, whom are paralyzed by the aura of the creature.  The beast harnesses the same eye symbol on it's head as it does Kitoku.


Kitoku:  Your friend is now gone.  That creature holds what I gave it, and that is the eye of wrath.  With it, it can duplicate itself and summon its own monsters, just as I can.  It is reproduction as its finest, and as long as population will grow, I will strive taking lives away, even if I have to recreate more.  That, provided your friend makes out alive, under permanent quarantine.

Senichi (still unable to move under the spell of the creature):  Why us?  We're the ones trying to protect the world and finding the others to annhilate, whatever is after us!  Why aren't you helping us?

Kitoku (after a few moments of silence):  Because I chose this path, not for the account of balance, but upon the eternal rule that the espionage of Zeus' counsel may ever walk this earth and make miracles for the sake of it's inhabitants.  I, am one of Lucifer's followers, and I shall do what I am born to:  Destroy and bring Nightmares upon my wake.  If there is a strong presence of Yin, so will Yang.  That is the way it must be.

Cecilia:  NO!  YOU'RE WRONG!  WE HAVE MORE THAN WE CAN BARGAIN FOR!  WE'RE INVADED BY A FOREIGN RELIGIOUS ENTITY, DRIVEN BY THIS WORLD'S MAJESTY AND CHILDREN.  ISN'T IT ENOUGH THAT WE HAVE TO FACE YOU?

Kitoku:  Oh, well, that is not my concern...  Shikon is his own being.  He chose to cross paths with what is black and white to us all.  Over there, there is no Heaven or Hell.  The game is played entirely different from what is interpreted from us all, when we assume that our particular God created it all.  Who is to say he looks human?  Then again, I would know..... (nods and closes his eye).

Under the creature, Giino's body twitches slightly.

Cecilia (puzzled):  I still can't believe what I am hearing...

* Senichi  slowly raises his sword...

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Kitoku notices Senichi and his efforts to rescue his near-death friend.  Cecilia turns an angry sky blue/gold in areas and begins to mutate.

Kitoku (snickering):  You too dare to defy my kingship?  Who are you to mock me with your futile counterfeit forms called "Demi?"  Perhaps I should learn you all a valuable lesson not taught by your elders...

* Senichi  continues reaching for control and finally raises his sword to his chest

Senichi (looking at Cecilia and Giino, back and forth):  Gihhhh...

* Kitoku  raises Mourn and Mercy and stands like a balance

Kitoku:  I bid you my most warming-farewell...

Cecilia (in her demi-state):  (Who the hell is he talking too?)

Cecilia feels something hard and metallic linked to her feet.  She looks down to see that she is locked by the chain of Mourn and Mercy.  However, the chain leads to the floor.  Exasperated, Cecilia struggles to free herself, however...

Cecilia:  UGH, GRRR, GET THIS TIME OFF ME!

* Cecilia  continues struggling against the unforgiving chains

Hopeless as she is, Kitoku continues lifting both maces, until....

He drops one into the ship, plummeting into the ship and into the ocean.  The entire vessel collapses slowly...


Senichi (gaining control again):  (Yes!)

Unfortunately...

Kitoku:  I wouldn't call for an early celebration just yet.

Cecilia falls with Mourn, now notified that Kitoku used his godly powers to enforce a curse on her, and now she is attached to Mourn, literally.  With this, Cecilia falls into the endless ocean, and driven by insane hunger, the Vermilion Carcass abandons Giino and dives for fresh bait.

Giino ("awaken"):  Nooo...

Everyone is at a state of panic.  Senichi, in the mean time, tries to keep his cool.  He has full control of his sword and blows a great blow, one much larger than a hurricane's.  He blew into his sword so loud, it cried an angry song around the Asian/Pacific.  It was loud enough to shatter all senses, and loud enough to pierce into the conscience of the creature now chasing for brunch.

* Senichi  continuing with his melody of melancholy

Giino (in his demon state):  Give her back.

Kitoku (with much dismay):  I'm afraid I can't allow that.

* Senichi  in back of Kitoku with his sword and clawed hands in action

Senichi:  TOO LATE!

* Senichi  spins a great spin in mid-air, going for a Vertigo-Smash

But Senichi misses with both hands and blade, though manages to wreck the ship even more as it is.

Giino:  SENICHI, BEHIND YOU!

* Kitoku  appears from behind with his arms crosses under each others sleeves

Senichi (totally out of control):  Fucking hell, he's fast!

And a little too late to notice...

Kitoku: You have much to learn, child.

* Kitoku  grabs Senichi by the ankle and spins him along with Mercy

Senichi (getting dizzy):  AUUGH!  AHHHHHHHHH!!!!

Kitoku:  SHARE THE FATE OF YOUR BELOVED!!!!

Senichi (losing control again):  AGHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!

* Kitoku  simply aims for the ocean, straight down, throwing Senichi into the watery grave

With these moments, Giino goes for a desperate save attempt in hopes to get Senichi out of Kitoku's grasp, but is too scared to react.

Kitoku (hitting Giino and knocking him out):  You're done for...  I should give you kudos for lasting this long against a being much higher than the usual hero.  You've proved yourself, but now this has come to an end...

"The creature, the beauty, the fool, and the shy, lies in the infinite pool of water, the so-called ocean that promises something much more than 75% of Earth.  Secrets too far to reach..."

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"But the fool is not just the royal fool.  He too holds a scepter of authority, and that scepter is the relinquish of a new frontier.... or at least, will expand the frontier..."

Giino is left to die in the belly of the monster, who hungers for a huge bite of revenge after what happened back at the cliff.  Oh yes, things are starting to look bloody at the very most.  Kitoku is covered in pieces of shredded flesh, blood, and rots like the body of a 1,000 men.  Even the sun of the day is easy to stare at.  Yes, the sun has lost it's luster in the eye of this horrible Death God.

However, things can't just end under Kitoku's rule, can it?  It would seem this was a setup.... Or is it?  What is the real accomplishment around here?  And why is Giino glowing green?


Giino (looking at Kitoku with a face of the Lord of Hell):  You.... fucking pile of dog shit.  You killed my friends, you destroyed my calamity, and now, my parchments of leisure, all torn down by the face of a man I see that I cannot help but to remind myself of...

Kitoku (surprised, yet amused):  Hahaha, FOOL!  You may have lasted enough time, but the sands of time have fallen to the very last GRAIN!  Now, you will DIE!

* Kitoku  spins his maces together (with the absence of Senichi and Cecilia) and rockets towards Giino in a drill-like fashion

Things are looking pretty darn gruesome...

* Giino  dodges the attack so fast, he was able to swim through the ocean and back in time for lunch

So grotesque, that the childish mind of young Giino grows into a pit of hate and despair.  Without lament, Giino catches Kitoku under his sword and coils it further, strangling him.

Kitoku (struggling):  ARRRRRRRRRGH!  Y-YOU.....UN-.....GRATEFUL.....LITTLE.....CRETIN!

Giino is not playing around anymore...

Giino (turning demonic again):  No Kitoku, the only one who is to be ungrateful, are the lights of you.  Oh wait, that's right,  THERE'S NO LIGHT UNDER THAT CLOAK OF YOURS!  YOU LOUSY FUCKING TRAITOR!  YOU CAN'T EVEN SERVE A TRUCE FOR THE SAKE OF HUMANITY!  YOU NEVER STOPPED TO CONSIDER YOUR LIVES, IN THE AFTERMATH!

Giino completely loses a sense of leisure, and turns a-new-brain, now focused more on the situation.  In fact, he grows much more intelligent.  He is no longer the jester at the moment.  He is the beast of the stealth.

The creature awaits further orders, and in turn of all of this, peace and quiet surrounds the two.  The conflict is just to great, however, something appears from the water.


* Giino  ignores the presence and proceeds smashing Kitoku all over like a chain mace

CRACK, CRACK, CRACK, CRACK, CRACK.....

Kitoku:  (I'm unmatched with this boy's power.  I have to retreat now)

Giino (enraged):  THIS IS FOR RAPING THE SHIT OUT OF MY GIRL!  AND THIS IS FOR SENICHI, ONE OF MY ONLY COMRADES!  AND THIS ONE-

Kitoku (teleporting):  ENOUGH!

* Kitoku  grabbing Giino's neck from behind

Kitoku:  You proved just enough for today...

Kitoku holds on as Giino struggles.  The day light somehow brightens to no end until everything becomes "invisible." The creature moans out of lack of digestion, and everything begins to change in scenery.  In fact, Kitoku disappears in such a way, Giino can still be seen in the air, grabbed...

The only truth behind it...


Kitoku (awkwardly):  (The next time we meet, don't be so naive as to risk your own life, or succumb to my power.  Today, you were lucky.  Therefore....)

...

Kitoku looks at the being that came out of the water.  It looks back at him, eye-to-eye.  The image is incredibly faint, for it appears to be a man with a long, dark sword.  They gaze at each other, and then, Kitoku turns around and disappears entirely into the void.

Kitoku:  (I will call out your death and spare your precious "items" and friends...  Farewell, till' we meet again...)

Mysterious Being (disappearing as well):  *Nods*

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"The joys of life, ruled down by a colony of dominant species known as man, on this Earth...  They question their own decisions and one another.  Choices upon good and evil, and what really is good and evil.  Decisions all generalized in terms far too complicated to study or examine, or better yet, defined under what truly is..."

Birds chirp and woodpeckers peck works of art on these vast tree trunks.  The beach is as salty as the sea's reflection in the sky, packed with fluffy clouds and specks of white-chained light from the sun.  All that heat-in-tongue that dehydrates the soul of a thirsty man.

Giino and Senichi wake up to find themselves stranded on the same beach from their departure.  Only this time, it is deserted...


Giino (rubbing his eyes):  What's going on?  (Looks a Senichi, who's barely awake)  Hey Senichi, where are we?

Senichi gives Giino a glare of concern, and he only does the same.

Senichi (looks down and frowns):  Hmmm, I think we're in the same sand bed...

Giino looks around to see their location.  They are in the same beach as before, only, all that happened seemed like a blur...

Giino (looking at the sea):  Senichi...

Senichi:  Yes?

Giino:  Do you think?

Senichi makes a small gasp, and searches for his sword.  He grabs what appears to be his blade, tucked to the sand, and pulls it out.  Giino checks for his sword, and his "extra credit" and proceeds.

Senichi:  A dream?  A nightmare?  I really don't know.  It all seemed so real.

Giino looks down with much regret and concern.

Giino:  Senichi...

Senichi:  Yes?

Giino sighs for one moment and looks back at the forest behind them.  Giino puts his hands together, making sort of a short prayer, and looks back at Senichi.

Giino:  We're not going to Asia, are we?

Senichi (with deep regret):  No Giino, I don't we're going anywhere.  I think Kitoku made it clear to us.  I think we should go back-

Giino stands up and stomps on the sand, making a crater and scaring a flock of birds away.

Giino (with anger):  AND LEAVE KAROKU BEHIND?  WHAT ARE YOU?  INSANE?

Senichi:  Damn Giino, calm the heck down!  *Sigh* you're right about one thing though...

Giino (calmed and curious):  And what's that?

Senichi:  Karoku is a refugee just like us.  If we even try to sneak into Ryokou and bring any friends with us, we're screwed.  Remember Keya-mari?  She's incredibly crafty.  If anything she ever catches sight of us, she will turn us in.  Amine, on the other hand, is someone we could wind up taking in easily.  So is Jiro...  Hmm...

Senichi ponders for a moment, and makes his decision.

Senichi:  Alright Giino, let's go find these people and start our own band of fighters.  And before you say anything, I can track down Karoku's scent from a mile away.  I have a piece of his cloth right here.

Giino:  Why didn't you do this before?

Senichi (walking his way to the forest):  Because if I had sensed him, I'd say something earli-

Senichi pauses for a moment and smells something...

Giino:  What?  You smell him?

Senichi:  *Sniff, sniff* This smell, is soooo... pungent... GIINO!  WHEN WAS THE LAST TIME YOU TOOK A BATH!

Giino (punching Senichi on the head):  WHAT?  WHAT KIND OF BULL IS THA-  GIH!

Giino looks at a pile of rotten corpses, some with their organs sticking out, still twitching and blood flying around like sprinklers.  Bitten marks and a numbers of flesh, producing the horrible smell.  These were the pirates that fell victim to something atrocious...

Giino (scared):  What in the world?

Senichi (whispering):  It wasn't a dream after all.  Kitoku's monster must have had breakfast with these guys...

From the shrubs, a noise interrupts.  Someone is heard from behind the bushes.  Giino and Senichi ready their swords in fear of Kitoku's return.  Instead...

Karoku and Kevin come out of the bushes, and look at a surprised and relieved Giino and Senichi.


Karoku (with much relief):  GIINO!  SENICHI!  GUYS!  YOU'RE ALIVE!  YOU STUPID BASTARDS ARE ALIVE!

Giino:  KAROKU!  MAN, I'M GLAD TO SEE YOU IN ONE PIECE!  WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN MAN?!

Senichi (smiling):  Hey Karoku, we were worried.  Who's your friend?

Kevin (confused):  Hey Karoku, are these the guys you were talking about?

Karoku:  Yeah, these are!  Oh!  I almost forgot!  Alright jerks, I want you to say hi to our newest crew member, Kevin.  He's from America and he's supposed to be really smart.  Don't give him too much credit, just because he's white.

Karoku and the others laughs while Kevin turns red.

Kevin:  That's not funny!

Karoku:  I was just kidding...

Giino:  Hi Kevin, I'm Giino!  Since you are new to the group, expect to hear my genius poetry!

Senichi/Karoku:  Oh God.  Here he goes...

Kevin:  Genius.... poetry?

Senichi/Karoku/Giino: (with the first two repeating in monotone):  Ahem!  What do you think of this:  Someone who's Bi vs. someone who's hello!  HAHAHAHAHAHAHA (Karoku and Giino laugh sarcastically).

Kevin:  That was.... interesting....  ((Great... I'm stuck with another idiot...))

Karoku smells something foul, and turns to the bodies.

Karoku (walks to the bloody pile):  What the-  It couldnt be...  Could it?  Damn it, Kitoku.

The other look at Karoku, and Kevin gasps at the sight of the messy pile of rotting flesh and bones.

Karoku:  Could it really be.... him?

Kevin:  Hey man, are you alright?

Karoku's eyes turn a vivid red and glow, claws grow, and his fists tighten.  The ground under them begins to shake and grains of sand rise.

Karoku (teeth growing sharp):  You.... how could?  I'm gonna kill you.  Mark my words you son of a bitch:  I will have your head and step all over your fucking corpse.  I hope you can hear this...

Senichi approaches Karoku slowly and cautiously.  Kevin backs away.

Kevin:  I've seen him like this before  It scares the hell out of me.

Giino:  You know, Senichi can do the same.  Too bad he hasn't introduced himself yet...

Kevin looks at Giino with his jaws open.

Senichi:  Karoku?  Are you okay, man?

Karoku (flushed in temper):  Because I'm going to beat your sorry ass, 5,000 times and counting.  Just you wait.  I will destroy you...

Karoku calms down, and turns around at the others.

Karoku (grins a little):  Heh, I'm okay.  Gee though, it doesn't get any easier, does it?

Giino:  Guess not...  Hey Karoku!  I know you'd hate us for this, but.  We thought for a moment...  We should go back and get some of our friends to accompany us-

Before he could react, Karoku was already on Giino, ready to beat the living day-lights out of him.  Held by the cloth, staring at Karoku's fist, waiting to be launched.

Giino:  AHHHH!  SENICHI!  I THINK WE WERE BEATEN BY KAROKU AND NOT KITOKU!

Karoku:  Teh, very funny, but I'm not laughing!

Giino (with a vs. match paper):  Well in that case-

Karoku:  THAT'S NOT WHAT I MEANT...

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* Karoku  raises his fist higher and gathers a more sinister amount of aura

Senichi:  Hmph!

* Senichi  appears beside Karoku, holding his arm and stopping him from wailing at Giino

Senichi:  You have to control your temper, Karoku.  He was just suggesting that we get extra help.  After all, you have us, remember?  Besides, we have plenty of other classmates that are like us.  Not many that will help, if all, but a select few at least.  And remember, it's not like we're going to just walk in and-

A flock of birds and animals come trampling and soaring in the air as something large and loud approaches from the sky.  A large wave of energy comes tumbling down from the sky as it closes in  to the ground.  A voice can be heard as well.

Cerreta (through a speaker):  Attention citizens of Japan.  We have 3 missing and wanted traitors that reside in our country.  They will NOT escape and will be trialed by the fullest extent of the law!  If you find them, please notify any of our staff members.  Here, you will see how they appear.  Be very careful when you encounter these refugees.  They are not to be taken lightly.  Remember, if you eve catch sight of them, notify any of ur staff members.  They will be searching all over the continent and onward, but until then, Japan will NOT allow anyone to enter, or anyone to leave without a license!  JUSTICE, WILL BE SERVED!

Karoku (nervous): Teh, yeah, says the guy who got his ass kicked by his worst student!

* Karoku  summons Shimikirbi from the ground

Karoku:  You know what?  I'm gonna call my blade Ultra-Violet from now on.  Sounds catchy too.  Alright guys, here's the plan:

Karoku summons yet another sword just like the one he has and grows out his wings to the largest extent.  He takes Senichi's sword and does a demonstration of some sort.  He also hardens the back of his body with his scales.

Karoku (wiping the mouth-piece):  Okay, I'm going to fly us over to the other side, but since I'm going to carry you guys, I might as well have extra flight power.  Also, given that you, Senichi, can blow into your own sword, I guess you can propel me higher so that I'd be able to lift everyone.  That will mean you'll have go on my tail.

Senichi and the others look dumb-founded and leave faces with remarks of uhhs and umms.

Karoku (getting impatient, and positioning himself):  Well?  What are you waiting for!  HURRY UP OR THAT GOD DAMN SHIELD WILL IMPRISON US FOREVER!

Kevin:  Alright, alright!  Errrhm, so, where's the passenger seat?  I'm suppose I sit on your back or something?

Karoku (sarcastically):  And I suppose you have no brighter ideas?

Giino, Senichi, and Kevin climb on top.  Karoku only barely moves down.

Kevin (bewildered):  Wow, I have to say.  Your hot-headed friend has a lot of strength for a skinny one.

The shield closes in, only 50 feet from reaching in on the border of Japan's sea...

Karoku (with much rage):  SENICHI!  NOW!

* Senichi  inhales as much air as he can and exhales into his sword, rocketing Karoku into the sky

Karoku:  Now that's the boost I needed!  SHIT!

Kevin:  We're still to far from the force-field!

As they close in, it is already too late...

However...


Karoku (looking up at Kevin):  KEVIN!  WE STILL HAVE A CHANCE! USE YOUR WATER ELEMENT TO LET ME FLY INTO SEA!

Kevin (scared):  I DON'T KNOW, WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO DO?

Karoku (losing his patience):  I DON'T KNOW!  JUST MOVE THE WATER AROUND US SO THERE'S SPACE FOR AIR!

Kevin:  ALRIGHT!

* Kevin  puts his hands together and forces the water around to make a tunnel

* Karoku  looks down and gulps.  He dives into the tunnel with his eyes closed

A few minutes after flying into the ocean, Karoku finally dives out in time to escape the force-field.  In fact, they finally left the borders of Japan.

Giino (amazed and excited):  We did it!  We're finally out on our own!  Asia, here we come!

Senichi (looking with approval):  Yeah, here we go.  Us group of trouble-makers are going to bring piece to this world...

Kevin:  Yeah.....  Hey, while we're up here, why don't you hear a little story of how Karoku fought Tim!

Giino:  Oh, a little story vs. a big tale.  In fact!  Why not hear more vs. matches instead!  The day looks promisiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing!

Karoku/Kevin/Senichi:  NO!!!

And so, the four make there way to Asia, wondering where they'll set in first.  Relieved that all made it in one-piece from the clutches of Shikon, Shikki, Tim, and Kitoku, all set out with faces of optimism, and looking ahead for a brighter future.

And with that said...

(To be continued...)


[EDIT:] 2100Wiki

- From the moment that Karoku had faced Kitoku eye-to-eye, Kitoku has promised himself he'd do whatever it takes to kill off him and his friends.  That is why Kitoku had manipulated Giino and Senichi during their trip on Romano's ship.

- Cecilia does love Giino, but her instincts as a Pirate only allowed her to see him for the enemy that Pirates despise:  Samurais/Ninjas.

- Despite his profile, Romano is a good guy, and he too was under Kitoku's spell, forcing him to make the fatal mistake with the liquor.

- The same creature, that Giino and Senichi had fought is not dead, and made its way through the trench, which lead to the ocean.

- Kitoku states that the choice made by Zeus to allow the super-natural forces of good take side for the Earthlings could not go undone without Lucifer's children to take refuge as well.

- Kitoku decides to spare the lives of everyone on the ship for their long-enough encounter (who claims to have killed those in less than a certain amount of time)

- After Giino and Senichi had their judgments placed by Kitoku, they reappear in the same beach they had left, safe-and-sound.

- The figure that appeared in the blur of the shining day-light was a Chapter as well, but yet is to be revealed of this one.

- The massive pile of flesh was Kitoku's doing.  The only thing Giino was wrong about was the monster.  If anything, the monster would have eaten them whole.  Kitoku made them implode somehow.

- Giino and Senichi find Karoku and Kevin, who also run into each other after planning to recruit more allies in their journey.

- Scared, Karoku assaults Giino and hopes to make him change is mind about going back.  Instead, Karoku himself decides to make a quick get-away, especially after what they have heard from the speakers.

- Cerreta and the entire committee and staff of Ryokou, Union Academy, and Japan, have a satellite installed in space that not only set the force-field, but also has thousands of hidden speakers all over the country, for semi-communistic reasons.  Everything from this point on, is it's own conspiracy.

- Karoku and his friends do make it in time, and set out in the skies ad seas in hopes of reaching their next destination:  South Korea.
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« Reply #1 on: October 08, 2008, 10:43:44 PM »

I liked page 1 more than page 2. Giino and Cecilia is awfully and obviously much funnier than the bout between Romano and Senichi. It's funny how Cecilia seems to have taken a liking to Giino... I wonder if it would develop. HAHAHAHA.
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« Reply #2 on: October 09, 2008, 07:35:04 AM »

I liked page 1 more than page 2. Giino and Cecilia is awfully and obviously much funnier than the bout between Romano and Senichi. It's funny how Cecilia seems to have taken a liking to Giino... I wonder if it would develop. HAHAHAHA.

Yes, I can see why.  After all, Giino is beloved for his sense of humor.  Don't know, maybe I will pair them Wink

But in all cause, it's based on a scenario between Giino and his affair with this other girl he once knew.

Romano and Senichi just seem too sudden, so I can understand why it isn't as epic as Giino's part is funny, so I'll try to mix both in this chapter.
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« Reply #3 on: October 09, 2008, 07:49:41 AM »

Romano and Senichi just seem to sudden, so I can understand why it isn't as epic as Giino's part is funny, so I'll try to mix both in this chapter.

True enough, the degree of Senichi's part being epic as Giino's part being funny did lack certain momentum as people would say. It was for me like a plummeting fall in a story that I didn't find desirable. Cutting humor for something epic is certainly something adrenaline-depreciating as compared to what you did in the last chapter wherein you cut action with what was happening to the order. The latter formed suspense while the former formed discontent.

I was trying to search for something more in Senichi's part. The only thing that made the devaluing less than it was supposed to be was when Romano suddenly asked Senichi to drink with him and Senichi somewhat mumbled that he's too young to drink.

This reminds me of a friend who's actually younger than me. And when our organization had a speed dating event with alcoholic drinks, he kept telling us, "but I'm underaged" and we just kept saying, just say you're 18. We were good enough too not force him to drink with us and like Romano, we gave him some Cali, which we all know has no alcohol content, or at least in my country if it is the case in America. I guess, it was pretty much that personal experience that made me like Senichi's part despite not being able to level up to the Giino's part.
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« Reply #4 on: October 09, 2008, 12:17:01 PM »

True enough, the degree of Senichi's part being epic as Giino's part being funny did lack certain momentum as people would say. It was for me like a plummeting fall in a story that I didn't find desirable. Cutting humor for something epic is certainly something adrenaline-depreciating as compared to what you did in the last chapter wherein you cut action with what was happening to the order. The latter formed suspense while the former formed discontent.

I was trying to search for something more in Senichi's part. The only thing that made the devaluing less than it was supposed to be was when Romano suddenly asked Senichi to drink with him and Senichi somewhat mumbled that he's too young to drink.

This reminds me of a friend who's actually younger than me. And when our organization had a speed dating event with alcoholic drinks, he kept telling us, "but I'm underaged" and we just kept saying, just say you're 18. We were good enough too not force him to drink with us and like Romano, we gave him some Cali, which we all know has no alcohol content, or at least in my country if it is the case in America. I guess, it was pretty much that personal experience that made me like Senichi's part despite not being able to level up to the Giino's part.

Ahh, but it's all the more to bring suspense!  That's what you should expect!  I'm just stalling for the punch-line.  You'll see how I'll mix these things together.  It'll get pretty wacky.  Don't underestimate me DJ.  I know Gino irl, and we've been coming up with some serious jokes.  Just wait and see is all I can say...

And for balance, I was just trying to get the reader to know what is going on with Order, otherwise, they'll forget what the whole Chapter is about as well.
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« Reply #5 on: November 23, 2008, 11:10:00 AM »

Double-Post:

Chapter 6 is officially done!
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« Reply #6 on: November 23, 2008, 04:18:33 PM »

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« Reply #7 on: November 23, 2008, 04:22:20 PM »

* 0blivionJack high fives Juan
YES! Awesome Juan, can't wait for the next one  Grin

Well, before that, I need to draw the next 5 characters all in a row xP

That, or I'll just continue writing until I get a new set of pencils...
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