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« Reply #60 on: November 11, 2008, 07:49:02 PM »

I think you should change his hair to dreadlocks then since it kinda does look like dreadlocks already ^_^

Meh, I'll go with what I have in mind. I plan on drawing a more "action-y" depiction within the near future, so hopefully I'll be able to work out the kinks then. He should have a more cunning persona as well.   
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« Reply #61 on: November 14, 2008, 12:59:10 PM »

okay...due to pressuring from Bobby (thanks a lot...), I'm now posting pictures that I have drawn (Visk, Blood Eye, Artemis (Rose), and Zeo)...be warned...they suck, in my mind anyway Tongue

http://img224.imageshack.us/img224/5958/viskiy4.jpg  <--- Visk

http://img186.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bloodeyelv3.jpg <--- Blood Eye

http://img385.imageshack.us/my.php?image=artemisrosemn1.jpg <--- Artemis (Rose)

http://img186.imageshack.us/my.php?image=zeouk1.jpg <--- Zeo

Sorry some of them are really big (ex: Visk), they just came out that way
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« Reply #62 on: November 14, 2008, 01:18:16 PM »

Sorry some of them are really big (ex: Visk), they just came out that way

I had this trouble with my drawings as well. I'm not sure if there's a way to change them now, but if you re-upload them, you can change their dimensions.

If I recall correctly, 640x480 is a good resizing measurement.
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« Reply #63 on: November 14, 2008, 01:20:35 PM »

I had this trouble with my drawings as well. I'm not sure if there's a way to change them now, but if you re-upload them, you can change their dimensions.

If I recall correctly, 640x480 is a good resizing measurement.
I'll see if that works if I ever get the time to...

Eh...no. The hair a failed attempt at an anime-type hairstyle I had in my mind, similar to Scott Summers in X-Men: Evolution:



I've never really experiment with hair before - and its especially challenging when its suppose to be jet black.
Lets just say it looks quite good in my mind's eye. Tongue
Cyclops is a bad example of a stiff Tongue...
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« Reply #64 on: November 24, 2008, 07:57:21 AM »

Are those dread locks? on the dude?
/me doesn't have dreads Angry
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« Reply #65 on: November 25, 2008, 07:51:58 PM »

hey, here's my current logo (I like it anyway)

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« Reply #66 on: November 26, 2008, 01:21:00 PM »

I wish I had a logo like that :c

What's the Z mean ? There is no T , F or O in that Z\ .
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« Reply #67 on: November 26, 2008, 01:40:13 PM »

I wish I had a logo like that :c

What's the Z mean ? There is no T , F or O in that Z\ .
I WILL MAKE A BRYAN LOGO!
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« Reply #68 on: November 26, 2008, 01:46:25 PM »

I wish I had a logo like that :c

What's the Z mean ? There is no T , F or O in that Z\ .
Z is my favorite letter!  Plus there are four races in my story (four lines), and four story ideas I'm thinking of...
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« Reply #69 on: November 26, 2008, 02:11:49 PM »

Nice logo. I like how it makes me think of Zero's emblem. Cheesy

If you're going to use it as a series logo, you might want to incorporate the Z and the line (an I, L, or whatever you want it to be) into the title just to give it some meaning to the readers/players.
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« Reply #70 on: November 26, 2008, 02:16:41 PM »

Nice logo. I like how it makes me think of Zero's emblem. Cheesy

If you're going to use it as a series logo, you might want to incorporate the Z and the line (an I, L, or whatever you want it to be) into the title just to give it some meaning to the readers/players.
heh, nice idea.

for example: Powerz+\
but what would I use for Chroternate?
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« Reply #71 on: November 28, 2008, 01:53:48 PM »

double post...here it is...due to pressuring from Bobby, here is the "Jason Adventures".  (hope you guys like it)

"Chapter 1: The Stone

The stone...it seemed to draw me to it.  I grabbed it, and it glowed
bright blue.  While it was glowing, I could see moving pictures, I
could see some things, but I didn't know what they could mean.  I put
it down and tried to think.

I'm a 15 year old Talent boy named Jason on the planet of Cryptos.
I'm told that I have the gift of fore-sight, I'm able to tell when a
disaster is about to come, yet strangely, I wasn't able to see this
come.

After a bit of thinking, I decided to go and do what the note told me
to.  Which was going to help my  people, where ever they could be, not
knowing what would happen.



 Chapter 2: Working with the stone

I had looked all over the country of Aquia, where my village was for
months, or was it years?  Yet somehow, I had no trace.  During all
that time, I kept the stone a secret from others, in a pouch I keep
around my neck with a protective shield like substance I found I could
create, which would drive a person into madness over a fake future of
theirs.

I kept on also noticing the stone and what seems to be it's power.  It
keeps on calling, but not to me all the time.  I have a feeling that
it also calls to outside this planet, as strange as it seems.  But
while it was calling to others, I could hear some of what it was
saying.  Something like "war", "saving", "start", stuff like that.  I
decided that I could try to see if it could tell me something about
where my fellow townspeople were.

I tried that, and I saw a dark fort, filling with dark energies filled
with people I recognized.  "Zeliga!" I whispered to myself.  It was
the country of the dark elementals.  I didn't know where the fort was,
but at least I knew which country they were in.  And so I headed in
that direction.  To Zeliga.


 Chapter 3: A Strange Companion

I would have waited to say something for latter, but something
happened now that was strange.

About halfway to Zeliga, I was trying to communicate again with the
stone.  And it worked all too well.  A ghastly young girl came out.
Here is what she said;

"I am the great orb of prophesy.  I will warn you, to succeed, you
will need to get many things before hand.  You will need the second of
the four great orbs.  Also known as the great orb of souls. You'll
also need as many regular orbs of power as you can get.  Second, you
will need to befriend some companions which you will meet.  Do not
make enemies unnecessarily.  Lastly, get both the sword of light, and
the sword of darkness.  I will watch over and advise you when you
need.  But for now, so long!"  And went back into the stone, which was
apparently the great orb.


 Chapter 4:   The Second Stone

First part of business, get the other stone or "orb" as Fortune said
(that's what I'm calling the stone/orb now after our meeting).  She
told me that the "great orb of souls" would be in the "Never Ending
Room".  Whatever that was.  According to Fortune it was in a building
in Vira (land of the wind elementals).

"Say," I began "why do people call it 'Never Ending' if it's in a building?"

"Because in charge of the protection of the orb is the Mage Meditrina."

"Mages?  You mean their real?  I thought that they were just stories."

"And as usual," Fortune said in her calm peaceful voice "you are
getting proven wrong."

"Charming."

We finally got to Vira, and in front of the building.

"You know, it's smaller then I expected." I said.

"And since when has size mattered?"

"Good Point."

We entered the building and I was surprised that inside, was the orb.
The surprising thing was that it seemed like it was miles away, when
in reality, the building was less then 10 yards across.

"Oh my!  That answers that question!"

"Which one?"

"The one that goes like "Why do they call this the Never Ending".  All
that's here is the room, the orb, the pedestal on the orb, and that
voice that I keep on hearing."

"The voice is probably the orb."

"No, it's not.  If it was, we'd also see a figure showing.  Or at
least a glow of power from it.  You should know this!"

"Oh...well, it's probably Meditrina then.  Try listening to it."

That was what I was doing from the beginning.  This is what I heard:

"I don't know...I would go if I could, but unfortunately Maximilian
wouldn't let me go if I asked...hahaha!!!  That's a very good
impression of him...wait...no, I just thought I heard something...it's
probably some more intruders, I wasn't expecting anyone today...talk
to you later...love you too... bye..."

Suddenly, a woman who looked like she was full of power and authority
appeared halfway between me and the orb.

"What are you doing here!"

"Well, ummm...you see, I heard some talking about some power here, and
came to investigate." I lied, unwillingly, but I didn't want to reveal
Fortune quite yet.

"I'm sure.  And by the way, you suck at lying, try a different tale."

"Well, it's true enough."

"White lies hardly ever satisfy me.  Either leave, say your reason for
coming, the truth this time, or let me imprison you for a while.  15
years sounds good."

"Okay then, I have a little voice in my head that tells me random
things which led me here to get that orb, which I should take now if
you'll let me."

"Fine, close enough.  I can just read your mind anyway and figure out
all these outs and ends."

"Heh, over my dead, fried brain."

"I'd rather you not, since that defeats the purpose, but anyway, what
are you willing to give up for my little orb?"

"Some time here, energy there, and some usage of charm.  What kind of
answer are you looking for?"

"Eh, I was thinking an eye, voice, or a hand.  Or a good fight for it."

"That I'd be willing, except one: I don't have a weapon, and two:
you're a bit more powerful then I am power-wise."

"True.  Good Points.  How about this then, you get orb of souls, and
you have to do me five favors.  Not necessarily now, but over time in
your life."

"But what if I die before the five?"

"That's where the perks for you come in, basically, I make sure that
you don't die until you do me all five favors.  Then you're at the
mercy of fate, wits, powers, etc."

"Okay then, fine.  Deal!"

It was done.  I got the orb.  She got the 5 favors for whatever she
wanted whenever she wanted.  Well, anyway.  Time to get the swords or
light and dark!


 Chapter 5:   Hurry, Hurry

So far I had the orb of souls and the orb of prophesy.  All I needed
was the "Luminarium", the sword of light, the "Atra", sword of
darkness, and some companions.  All according to Fortune of course.

I decided that the "Luminarium" would be the first sword I'd get.  I
asked Fortune where it was.

"It should be on the top, or in the center of the Electric Mountain in
Statek, the land of the Earth/Dirt/Land elementals." She replied.

"What's with all these oxymoron?"

"They're meant to describe the area.  They just happen to sound like opposites."

So there we were again.  Traveling to a place I never went to.
Suddenly, one night when I was getting ready to sleep, everything
started fading to green.

"Hello." said a familiar voice.  'Great' I thought.  Just what I need.
 Meditrina.

"I've come for the first favor, sorry it's kind of quick, but you can
understand how time can be unpredictable I'm sure."

"Okay, what do you want me to do?"

"I want you to go to the Electric Mountain—"

"Good, I was going there anyway."

"I wasn't finished." Meditrina said cooly. "I need you to infiltrate a
Ravanoch base of operations, and then tell me what they're going to
do."

"Sorry lady." I began. "I've done enough with the Ravanoch in my
travels.  Besides...they don't like Talents anymore since a water
elemental named Raiden took over after their old leader Sion died
mysteriously on a mission."

"You forget two things.  I am a Mage, and you cannot die until you
fulfill all five favors."

"But there are things so much worse then death."

"Don't worry, I can make you look like an elemental.  And even
temporarily give you elemental powers.  Which one would you like."

I pondered for a few seconds.  "Earth, because it'd be easier to use
on the mission."

"Wise decision.  You will also have your talent power as well, so
don't worry about that.  Here we go:

Power of the Mages, hear me speak,
Give this boy earth powers at it's peak,
Until his mission's done at last,
Then, keep only the powers of his past!"

I then felt physical changes that I thought should have hurt.  Also,
at the same time, I felt a mental connection, that suddenly remembered
how to control things.

"Don't mind the physical and mental changes." Meditrina started. "To
be able to control such a sturdy and firm element, you have to be
bigger and stronger in both body and mind, to explain your increase in
physical strength and how your mind is more open."

"Heh, I don't mind this if it were permanent."

"But it isn't, so go to your mission!  And hurry, my information tells
me they'll only be there for only a little while longer.  Basically a
week at most."

"That'll be plenty of time!"

Then as suddenly as I had appeared, I was in front of what I could
only guess as the electric mountain.

"Well, that went well." Fortune commented.



 Chapter 6:   A Pleasant Surprise

I went to the front cave of the mountain.

"I hope you know what your doing." replied Fortune.

I ignored the sarcastic comment.

"I'm wondering...Fortune?"

"Yes?"

"Why don't I see the figure for the orb of souls like I see you?"

"I don't know.  He/she might be shy, not awakened yet, or he/she is busy."

"Okay, just wondering."

I was coming up to a gate with five guards.

"You may pass.  We were expecting you." Said the middle one. "Raiden
wants to speak with you as soon as possible."

"Of course." I replied.  Didn't want to get on the wrong side of these
fellas.  Soon, after walking for a bit, I was in a room where I was
alone with Fortune (now hidden away in my protective pouch) Raiden,
and someone else who I never met before.

"Welcome here..." Raiden began implying that he wanted me to say my name.

"I am known as Mystery." I said, reciting my fake cover name.

"Well, your being here sure is one.  I don't believe we recently sent
scouts for earth elementals.  So how did you hear from us."

"By word of mouth, hearing stories here and there.  And finally,
decided to come here.  I'm thinking about joining, and I came to see
if the stories were right."

"Congratulations!  You found us.  Now you either join or die."

"Could I pick option C, think about it and come back to share my
answer with you?"  It was unnerving speaking with such a crazy leader
who seemed like he'd do anything to rule all and kill anyone or
anything in his way.

He laughed for a bit then calmed down.  "You seem to not know our ways
as much as you'd like to think we do."  I expected that answer.  "I
will not risk our lives to have you go and run to whomever you might
work for so that they can kill us all.  Hypothetically anyway."  He
stood up and half turned towards the stranger.

"Zeus, lead Mystery to one of the empty rooms.  You can pick which
one.  After he gets...situated, take him to the training area.  I'm
assuming that he'll join us eventually."

"Yes Raiden.  Of course."

Zeus led me to a room away from everything else.

"Have a blast." He said, then left.

"Wow.  We actually got in without much trouble." I commented. "Let's
hope it stays that way."


 Chapter 7:   Uh-Oh

I finally completed my first favor.  All I needed to do now was leave
and tell Meditrina what I found out.  But first, I needed to get the
Luminarium.  Unfortunately, I had to be on a tight schedule according
to Raiden.  Right now, I was sword training with one of their spare
swords, then going to practice with a weapon that I never saw before
called a "blaster".  They said that they got them from humans who came
here from earth.  Whatever, that didn't concern me at this point.

My plan was that I was going to go to the top of the mountain during
my free time after blaster practice.  Then, later today, I was going
to sneak out with the help of my earth powers, which helped quite a
bit down here.  All I needed to do is...

"MYSTERY!!!" called one of the captains.

"Yes sir?"

"Raiden needs to see you now."

"Okay..."  I walked down to his office.

"Hello Raiden." I said hoping my cover wasn't blown.

"Good morning Mystery.  I have here a guest I'd like you to meet."

Suddenly, a figure rose from the shadows of the room.  In his hand, he
had a sword which was like a twisted.

"This is Curve.  A wind elemental.  And he will be known as well, as
your executioner Mystery, or should I say, Jason!"

"And how did you find that out?"

"And why would I tell you!  Curve, kill him now!"

Luckily enough I brought my own practice sword, so I was able to block
Curve's first blow.  Causing him to hiss, allowing me time enough to
run.

I ran up some steps and got to the top of the mountain.  There I saw a
sword which I assumed was the Luminarium, and Zeus.

"Get out of my way Zeus.  I have orders from Raiden to get this sword."

"And since when would he ask for a sword he doesn't know about Mystery?"

"Don't you know that I'm Jason as well?"

"Yes, but I thought I'd spare you the dramatics.  But either way, the
sword isn't yours."

"Why not?  Why can't I have it?"

"Cause I'm the protector!  Chosen by Maximilian himself!"

"Great.  You too?  I'm Meditrina's."

"Your Meditrina's helper?"

"You could say that."

"Well, then I suppose you could have it then.  The boss said that her
helper could have it, because it would help him in his future deeds.
Now GO!"

And going I was...with the scene fading green and all.

"Good timing." I said to Meditrina.  And I told her what I heard.

"Good job Jason.  When you leave, you will find that you're back in
your own body, with just your talent.  Now, go back to your quest, I
shall get you later when I'm in need."

And it faded back to where Fortune and I were before I did the favor.
And I found that she was correct in that I had my old body and powers
back.

"Good job Jason.  Now you're armed with the Luminarium.  And you
completed the first favor." Fortune complemented.

"Right." I said tiredly.  "And now for the Atra."



 Chapter 8:  An Unexpected Ally

"So, where is the Atra?" I asked Fortune.

"It's in the Ice Desert.  Which is at the border of Zeliga and Aquia."

I sighed. "You know, you could have told me that it was there, that
way we could have gotten one immediately."

"I didn't though because I see the future and I could see you going
for the orb of souls first, then the Luminarium, and now, the Atra."

"I'm beginning to get annoying with the flow of time."

During that next stormy night, I was trying to think of the quickest
way to get to the Ice Desert.  I just finished thinking the best way,
when a bolt of lightning came 6 feet away from where I was sleeping.

"Hello." said a familiar voice.

"Zeus?"

"Right here!" he said proudly.  "Three things led me here.  A guilty
conscience, Maximilian told me to, and it was boring with the Ravanoch
anyway."

"How did you get here?"

"My electric powers."

"Oh yeah, you're a talent."

"Er...actually a Human."

"What!?!  But if you're a human, how do you have powers?"

"A tale for another day."

"Well, would you be able to do that lightning zoom for me to the Ice Desert?"

"I probably could.  But why would you want...oh never mind, obviously the Atra."

"How do you know that?"

"One word: Maximilian."

"Of course.  Can you do it now?"

"Sure.  Just a second, need to help move the storm in that direction."
 As I packed up a bit, Zeus seemed like he was in a trance.  After we
were both done, he told me that I had to hold his hand for it to work.

"Just wondering, is your name really Zeus?" I asked.

"No, it's just a nick-name." he answered back before he began the
transportation.

Next thing I knew, I was in a icy cold field in front of a cave.

"That's where it is?" I asked.

"Yes." Zeus replied before Fortune could acknowledge.

I entered the cave expecting some guardian or danger.  But to my
surprise there wasn't.  At lest there wasn't yet.

Then I saw the sword, around it a dark aura.  Luckily, Fortune already
told me what incantation to say, and pulling the Luminarium out,
pointing it at the aura said:
"Light, vanquish this everlasting dark,
Pray, don't miss this binding mark."

A blast of light shot out of the tip of the sword and covered the
aura, making it disappear.  I took the Atra, and left...or at least
tried to.  What I found was that the exit was blocked off by a black
and white energy.

I tried going through it, but only got a sharp pain in my mind.  But
somehow, that spark in my mind gave me a idea.  I got out the
Luminarium and Atra and said this aloud:
"Swords of light and dark combined,
Use your powers in one mind,
Use it to free me from this cave,
Free me from that power, and behave!"

Blasts of black and white shot from the swords, united with the
purpose to free me, the energy blocking me off had no chance against
both swords!

"Now," I started to Zeus after I got back, "can you take us to the
dark tower in Zeliga?"

"Yes...but not now.  The storm is gone, and I don't have enough energy
to create one.  Unless you have a water elemental with you, which I
doubt."

"Okay then." I said. "I suppose we can go the journey on foot."

A few days later, we were there.  Right at the gates of some madman
with only two great orbs, two swords, a electrified human, and me.
Fun right?
 Chapter 9: Facing the Enemy

So there we were.  Right at the gates of the dark tower of Zeliga.
The tower itself looked awesome, and filled with power.  I looked at
the gate.  It looked like it was filled with dark energy, so who knew
what could happen if I touched it.  I then looked at the wall it was
connected to.

Unfortunately, the wall was too smooth to climb with just my hands.
Luckily, I also had two swords of power.  In the end, I decided that
for security reasons, it would be easier and safer to climb the wall
by using the swords as hand holds.  Zeus got on using his lightning
powers to cling on to the wall.

When we were on the top, we could see that there were only two guards
up in front which Zeus took out by zapping them.  We then got inside.

"Where to now?" Zeus asked.

"How about towards there." I said pointing at a fancy big door.

We walked some more past it, until we finally reached a locked door,
which was quickly solved with a spell from the swords.  We walked
through, to see a figure in dark clothes, with blades on his two arms.

"Why hello." he said.  "Isn't this a change of plans.  Allow me to
introduce myself to you.  I, am Umbra.  Ubel's personal assistant.
Welcome to the tower of Zeliga!"

 Chapter 10: A Battle of Wits and Magic

"Get out of our way!" I stated. "Or else."

"Or else what?" he challenged. "Your going to do something "terrible"?"

"Yes," began Zeus. "First, we're going to cut you to shreds,
electrocute you do death, stab you some more, then we'll just walk
away like civilized Cryptonians."

"Well, excuse me for not jumping up and down singing Kum-ba-yah til
Kingdom Come.  I'd rather just stop you right here.  Un-like civilized
Cryptonians if you please.  I also wouldn't mind riddling you til you
just explode from thinking too hard.  Which one do you pick?"

"How about the riddle one?" I replied.  Little known to both Zeus and
Umbra, I had once been dubbed "Riddle-Master" in my town.

"Excellent!  Gives me oppertunities to just drive people mad!  Don't
you like doing that?"

"Never tried."

"Shame.  Anyhow, try this easy riddle..." he began while taking out a
small pocket-sized box.  "This box holds the key to life,  The
beginning of strife, and the maker of many a knife.  What is it?"

I thought for a bit, seeing how I had never heard the riddle before.
"Is it water?" I finally asked after some thinking.

"Correct.  On to the next one..." he did some shadow creations with
his hands, and to the surprise of Jason, the shadows came up in 3-D.
"One day, this hawk spotted this mouse."  At this point, there were a
mouse 3-D shadow, and a hawk shadow, who's head was looking at the
shadow mouse..  "The hawk dives to get the mouse, catches it, and
brings this poor mouse to the nest."  With those words, the shadow
hawk dived and "grabbed" the shadow mouse, and then disappeared.  "Why
did this mouse not get eaten?"

Now this was a hard one for me.  I couldn't think of any explanation.
I was about to give up when a simple answer came to me.

"Because the hawk and mouse are shadows." I answered, hoping that I was right.

"Gee, you ARE good!  Well, you can go now in whichever direction you want."

"Thanks." I said.  Although I got a bad feeling from Fortune's and my
new weak mental link.  "See, that wasn't too bad." I told Zeus.  And
to myself.  There was something about Umbra that made me like him at
one hand, but not trust him at all on the other.

When Zeus and I were just barley at the door, something happened.  I
suddenly saw a shadowy version of both me and Zeus, and immediately
knew who did that.  Unfortunatly, before I could get him, the shadows
from the walls came up trapping me and Zeus with our shadow versions.

"Hi."  I started, thinking of a way to get out of this.

"Jason."  Zeus started.

"What?"

"Do you still have the Luminarium and Atra?"

"Yes, why?" although wheels already started turing in my head.

"Use them against these fakers!"

So I did.  I pulled out the Luminarium, and stabbed the Zeus version,
causing the shadow to burst in light, and disintegrate back to shadow.
 I then turned to the shadow version of me, and stabbed that shadow
too.

Well, tried anyway.  He dodged, and took out his own sword and we
fenced for a bit before I finally got the chance after a wild swing he
made to hit him.  This time, I succeeded, and saw him turn back to
regular 2-D shadow.

"Good job." Zeus commentated from the back, looking tired.

"What did you do?"

"Electrocuted him enough to have him do that wild swing.  Anyway, know
how to get us out of this shadow prison?"

"I think so," I replied, and started to use both the Atra and
Luminarium to get us out.  And so we proceeded to the next door.
 Chapter 11:  An Incredible Solution

"Okay, so what are we looking for now?" Zeus asked.

"I don't know.  Fortune, any ideas?"  Fortune had come out a few
minutes ago to help.

"I see that you should go...to the left here!"

"Thanks!"  We walked through the door on out left to find ourselves in
a new room.  There was, in the room, a single step from where we were
to go lower.  There were also two green cylinders that went from the
floor to the ceiling a couple feet ahead, to the left and right of us
that looked like it held a creature each.  There was also one thicker
cylinder at the end of the room with what looked like floating forms
of people that were circling around the cylinder.

"What is this place?" I thought out-loud.

"What are those?!?" Zeus asked at the same time.

"The correct question," said a soothing voice, "is why are you here?"

"DAEVA!" Zeus exclaimed out-loud lurching out to grab her, but to no
avail because she dodged.

"That's no way to treat a lady Zeus." She remarked.

"Since when do you qualify as a lady?" he gave back.  "Zeo, give me
one of your swords please."

"No, anyway, what do you want Daeva?"

"I want to know why you're here."

"You want the truth, or the answer you want?" I asked.

"I want the truth.  Now give it to me." she said annoyed, but also persuasively.

"Fine."  I felt compelled to tell her.  "We're here to save the people
who used to live in my town.  And so that led us here."

"Nice, story." she started. "But now that I know what your after, I'll
be gone now."  She started to leave. "See you in—" she was cut off by
the closing door, although I could guess what she was going to say.

"We better run, it's a trap." Zeus said, also starting to leave.

"Why would you say that?  There's no way for a trap here.  I have a
feeling that the large cylinder up ahead of us has my family and
friends.  Although I don't know what the other two are.  Either way,
those cylinders look to thick and hard to break."  I said.  Right
after that though, a figure covered in black cloth jumped out of a
hole in the ceiling and took out two jagged-ended daggers.  But all
he...or she did was throw their knives at the cylinders, one per
cylinder, and then left.

"See!" I said. "It's hard enough to break through those!" that was
when the two creatures in the smaller cylinders seemed to wake up, and
the cylinders broke, dropping the knives, which the creatures stepped
on, breaking the knives in two, and drawn their two swords.

"Stupid force-fields. Stupid knives, and stupid Daeva" Zeus muttered to himself.

"Never mind what I just said.  What are those two anyway?" I asked.

"I don't know.  Seems like more darkness creations.  Either way, just
kill them.  And kill them good with a good old stab in the head.
Chest will work too."

"Thanks for the advice." I sighed out with sarcasm in my voice, and so
I started my melee with against them with the help of Fortune and
Zeus.  I was starting to get tired, when I realized that the creatures
swords could cut through the cylinder's broken pieces.  So I lured
them to the big cylinder at the end, and when they struck, expecting
me to block, they we're surprised when I dodged, and their swords cut
through the cylinder, freeing the forms who were previously in the
cylinder. The forms then seemed to slide out of the broken cylinder,
filling up the room.  While the creatures were distracted, I stabbed
them both where I guessed some important organ was in the chest,
killing them both in one shot...or stab.  Then I realized that I
didn't have the Orb of Souls anymore.  I looked around the room, and
saw a boy, who looked around the same age and size as Fortune.

He was walking around the room, and as he did, some white wisps left
him and entered into the still forms of my fellow townsmen, making
them look alive, but still unconscious.

"Who are you?" I asked him.

He didn't answer until he was done with all the bodies.  "I am the
figure of the orb of souls, as Fortune is the figure of the orb of the
future.  I am called Ziel.  I have copies of the souls of the dead or
of those in the state of containment, like these.  Although I have to
say I expected two other forms.  Would you have any idea where they
are?"  He looked around the room for those two bodies.  "Ah.  There
they are." and he walked towards the two creatures who I just killed.
"Unfortunately, these bodies are actually killed.  So I can't do
anything for them."

 Chapter 12 - Epilogue

Okay, I don't have that much time.  I keep on getting friends who come
over who forget what happened and want to remember.  Probably a
mistake that I mentioned what happened to them.

Apparently, the note and Fortune came from Fortune herself.  She had
seen what would happen in the future 5 years ago, and so knowing how
she had to be a part of it, came into my family's possession just for
that day.  When the time came close, she had the note made up, and
then that first day, set up everything that I needed to see and let
things happen.  Also, according to her, I escaped the fate the rest of
my townspeople faced only because she was sub-consciously helping me
use my powers in a way I'd never guessed I could..

Zeus after our adventure just left, saying that he "had things to do,
people to see".

Well, that's all that I have time for.  Someone is calling me."

again, hope you liked it...even if it sucks Tongue
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« Reply #72 on: June 05, 2009, 04:52:35 PM »

Here's a preview of a thing that I like to think about in my imagination.  I don't yet know if it would be better as a book or game...but I'm thinking of some interesting boss fights Grin!   hope you like it!

NOTE: Please don't take the scenes (other then this post and Jason Adventures) as what I'm sticking to, because I realize now that they're just horrible!

just noting the change I made first post
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« Reply #73 on: January 30, 2010, 07:24:51 PM »

So how's this story coming?
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« Reply #74 on: February 01, 2010, 01:02:10 AM »

So how's this story coming?
not too well, just reworking it in my head because this stuff on the thread is a piece of crap.
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